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Putting on a play?

Danishfurniturelover said:
It is a one of piece, I feel if it was a movie it would be on the BFI list for its subscribers.

The age of the protagonist has varied over several drafts from 16 to early 20s. Early 20s at times feels better to me because it would have more of a feel of a man who life is passing by. Just felt it would be to close to the Graduate which has been an heavy influence in my writing. Protagonist is the main character.

The dialogue has a bit of a woody allen feel to it, another heavy influence on my writing (whatever works being one of my favourite movies of all time) the protagonist or main character to you is a listless but nice guy, never been good with the opposite sex he meets and befriends a female outcast and though not huge amount happens, the dialogue is both poignant and funny and life affirming.

M wife, Lucy who has read it has made a couple of suggestions which might result into another rewrite. Apparently the main characters father only ever saying "sh*t or get off the pot" is not sensible for the plot. I think it is essential to set the tone of angst in the main character and how everyone in his life speaks in cliches that infuriate him and heightens his isolation, meaning the love story that follows even more beautiful.

Also I have to work out how to get the song from the mother about corn flakes stopping you masturbating into the play, maybe only 2 verses and the chorus song once, though am also wondering whether it will work better as a ditty rather then a full blown song. Fun fact, cornflakes were invented to stop people masturbating.
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SpurMeUp said:
Just the interval.

@Danishfurniturelover if you need to discuss some plot ideas or copy, you have a bevie of frustrated writers here at your disposal!
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The is yet another rewrite as I am now making the character gay. I have spoken to a couple of people about the play and though I felt some resistance to my ideas, I do understand that no great art was ever produced the easy way.

Struggles is part of all great artists lives.

One thing also is that we went to see The Death of A Salesman at the young vic, my first time there actually got to say the most uncomfortable seats. But what I loved about it was how they made use of the space and the actors spoke some of the lines from the aisles. They did this to convey space and distance in the relationships of the characters.

As the main character in the stalkers guide to ice cream has a poor relationship with his father something I may explore more as I am now making him gay. I think it would be great to make the father say all his lines from the back of the room. It may throw the audience off but so be it.

If I could get to a proper big theatre I would love to the fathers character actually hanging above the stage in a box, it would symbolise the boxes we all put ourselves in when we do not open our minds(I also know a fetish club where the is such a cage that hangs from the ceiling that could work as well)
 
Danishfurniturelover said:
The is yet another rewrite as I am now making the character gay. I have spoken to a couple of people about the play and though I felt some resistance to my ideas, I do understand that no great art was ever produced the easy way.

Struggles is part of all great artists lives.

One thing also is that we went to see The Death of A Salesman at the young vic, my first time there actually got to say the most uncomfortable seats. But what I loved about it was how they made use of the space and the actors spoke some of the lines from the aisles. They did this to convey space and distance in the relationships of the characters.

As the main character in the stalkers guide to ice cream has a poor relationship with his father something I may explore more as I am now making him gay. I think it would be great to make the father say all his lines from the back of the room. It may throw the audience off but so be it.

If I could get to a proper big theatre I would love to the fathers character actually hanging above the stage in a box, it would symbolise the boxes we all put ourselves in when we do not open our minds(I also know a fetish club where the is such a cage that hangs from the ceiling that could work as well)
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All sorts of awesome options. Could be a heckler (even seated in the stalls) that the audience finds out is the father.
 
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SpurMeUp said:
All sorts of awesome options. Could be a heckler (even seated in the stalls) that the audience finds out is the father.
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hmm

Not sure, I dont hate it, but not sure.


By the way I am now trying to dress the part of the play write. I wore a scarf today and I was not even cold and yes it was white.
 
I am having quite a lot of trouble getting anywhere to put on my production. I ask and ask, most places say you have to hand in a script first so they can tell your serious and then you need to prove you have a cast and the necessary funds to put on a production.

Dont know how Shakespeare put up with it all.
 
Chich, I’m over at Christmas and liking for something decent to watch in London . Assuming your masterpiece isn’t ready can you recommend anything?

The Ian Mckellen one man show looks good but do you know if there’s any good smaller plays?


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Thebarbarian said:
Chich, I’m over at Christmas and liking for something decent to watch in London . Assuming your masterpiece isn’t ready can you recommend anything?

The Ian Mckellen one man show looks good but do you know if there’s any good smaller plays?


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Bit far out mate. Mine wont be ready.

We are pretty much just going to the national in the autumn, might be quite a left leaning place but it is also a sure sign of quality any play that comes out from there.

Death of a Salesman will still be running then and having seen it before moving to the west end it is stunning. The man in the white suit looks quite good as well.

Of course Only fools is still running I have not seen it yet but I imagine it will be a great evening out.
 
So I had a meeting yesterday with the chaps and they most definitely are chaps who run the theatre.

I have done quite a lot of soul searching over this and it's changed in tone quite a bit, the is now a more state of the nation feel to it and has a new sub plot which would make it quite a good heist story.

Also the title will be changed to the oddball guide to choosing cake, this is to reflect a more romantic tone.
 
He apparently wants a lot of stagehands, although you should read the job description carefully before accepting.
 
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